Once upon a time, 12 little fish lived in a big giant pond. These fish were very very small, smaller than most perch or bait fish. The fish were all very timid, and scared of the big pond. The big pond was also a family member of theirs: their grandmother. But, the grandmother pond was not only inhabited by the 12 little fish. She also was the home to six big huge, evil garfish. These fish were mean, and they always tried to eat the little fish. They would chase the little fish and scare them. They would back them into corners of the pond, and separate them from the group of 12.
The small fish had finally had enough. They begged their grandmother river to help them. She knew this would not be an easy task, as the garfish were surprisingly clever. But, she loved her grand-fish, and would do anything to help them. She racked her brain for an idea to outsmart the garfish, and save her baby fish, and finally came up with one.
She called upon the clouds above her, and told them her plan. The next day, the clouds poured down as much rain as they possibly could. The grandmother pond grew and grew, until it had overflowed to the land next to it. The garfish were greedy, so they wanted to take this opportunity to go to the bushes, and other areas on land, so they could find something to eat that was different from the boring old 12 little fish. This was the grandmother ponds opportunity to save her grand-fish! She quickly cut off the parts of her pond that the garfish had escaped. They were now stuck in small ponds, all alone, and most importantly; away from the 12 little fish.
The garfish were so angry that the grandmother pond outsmarted them, and tried to jump and flop their way back to the main pond. But, they had no luck. The grandmother pond was relieved that her plan worked, and she was so excited that she could save her little fish. The 12 little fish rejoiced, and were so happy that they were safe again.
Bibliography: Grandmother River's Trick
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ReplyDeleteHi Haley!!
I think your story is really cute! It kind of reminds of a bedtime story a grandparent would tell to their grandkid. The cartoon fish is also a nice touch. I like you made the connection of the baby fish being related to the big pond. I'm not sure if that was from the original or if you came up with it but I do like it! I'm not sure if you noticed, but you're missing an Author's Note. I've done this so many times this semester
Hi Haley! I also think that your story was super cute. I really like how the grandmother is the hero of this story, because it is not something that you see often. I think adding an author's note would benefit for the readers of your story, to be able to understand the story better and see how you turned the original story into your own. I love the happy ending of this story!
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