There once was a farmer, who lived on a big farm. He had hundreds of different animals on his farm, from cows to chickens, and goats to horses. One of his horses was very obedient, and had done great work for the farmer since he was just a colt. But the horse had grown old, and couldn't work as well as he could when he was younger. Since the farmer couldn't get much use out of the horse, he kicked the horse off his farm. The farmer told the horse that he would have to fend for himself, and could only return to the farm if he became stronger than a lion. The farmer never expected to see the old horse again, since this was almost an impossible task.
The horse sulked through the forest, all alone, with nowhere to go. All of the sudden, a sly fox saw the horses despair, and asked what was wrong. The horse explained everything he had been through, and the fox took pity on the horse. But the sly fox had a plan to save the horse, and help him get back to the farm. He told the horse to lay down, and play dead. Then, the sly fox ran to the lion's den nearby, and notified the lion that a huge horse had just died, and it would be the perfect dinner for the lion. The lion was pleased, and followed the sly fox to meet his dinner.
When the two arrived to the horse, the sly fox convinced the lion that it would be easier if he could tie the lion's tail to the horse, so he could drag the horse back to the den to consume him easier. The lion agreed this would be much easier. But the fox tricked the lion, and tied all of his legs together so he couldn't escape. The fox told the horse to run back to the farm, with the lion tied to him.
When the horse arrived back to the farm, the farmer realized that the horse had become stronger than a lion. The farmer promised the horse he could stay forever, and he would never have to work another day in his life.
Hey, Haley! The fox is such a tricky character - I love it. I was curious as to what the horse and fox were going to do or what would happen; your story does a good job of heightening that curiosity. Also, I like that the fox helped the horse without any conditions or expecting something in return. Overall, the story was great and easy to follow!
ReplyDeleteHey Haley!
ReplyDeleteI think your story is great! I love that you included descriptive words because they made everything easier to picture in my head. My only suggestion would be to use some dialogue, maybe between the horse and the fox, to draw your readers in a bit more. Other than that, I think you did a wonderful job. I can't wait to read more of your stories!